Ok. There is your issue. The problem with your logline is that story itself may be a bit muddy which is why you are having trouble boiling it down a b…

Yes, I cover it on my TV course which you have access to as a yearly member. So I’d say check that out and it walks you through what to do and I provi…

One thing they are learning is that if you build it that doesn’t mean people will come…

Agreed! My wife and I were planning our days around watching an episode!

Let me know your thoughts.

This interesting but we have gone off the rails a bit here. Let’s use Alice in Wonderland. Here is the 2010 film logline. Nineteen-year-old Alice…

Wow. I do know a lot of the layoffs also have to do with them pairing down all the streaming as well.

Do you have a pitch deck yet?

I like that rework.

That’s really getting there! I am beginning to see the movie. We are still missing a bit of what the stakes/antagonist are though. I want you to find…

I’d say just boil it down and clarify it a bit.

OMG this sounds worse and worse the more you think about it. Full Stop!

I’m liking what I am seeing here. But yeah I agree it needs a little more work.